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since 改 when ; but this year 没有转折错,改moreover 合适些;award 不合适我认为,因为不是审判; China is a large country with a great deal of history 累赘,改为china is a large country with a magnificent history ; I am looking forward 后加toChina and the diligent Chinese people去掉china and 重复同时好像olympic似乎没有奥林匹克精神含义,表项目,加s 也不对 。应该加the spirit of olympics好点本人冒昧,不知对否 ,
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I have always dreamt of the Olympic Games since I was a little girl. But this year, it has another meaning to me because the 29th Olympic Games haaaas been awarded to the city of Beijing in 2008. As a Chinese, Olympic means proudness to me.
China is a large country with a long and brillient history .It is the first time for China to host the Olympic Games. That means China is becoming stronger and stronger in every hand. As a Chinese, Olympic means development to me. With the motto "New Beijing, Great Olympics", Beijing promises to host a "Green Olympics", a "Hi-tech Olympics" and the "People's Olympics". Everyone is trying his best for the Olympic. I am looking forward to hearing the whole world's cheering for China and the diligent Chinese people. This time, Olympic means unition to me. Olympic really means a lot, both to me and to the other Chinese peole. But all of us praies for the same thing. That is the success of the 29th Olympic Games in Beijing.
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