1. Hany many time- How much time( time不可数）2. 一行中的your dearer-your dearest最亲的3 二行中的 deep -deeply （ 用副词去修饰动词love)4. 三行中的 love_ don't love（ but even though转折，所以用否定）5 三行中的： become more close- become closer ( close的比较级是：closer)6 四行： the end of year- the end of the year7. 四行： for families get together-for families to get together8. show your parents that you love them- show your love to your parents9. have talk with them- have a talk with them10 最后的happily-happy( be + 形容词）如果有不对的地方请多指教哟
1。how many ---how much 因为money 不可数；2。you ---your;3.dearer---dearest ;因为是在全世界范围内的人来说的，人数大于三个人，应该用最高级；4。去掉when you are young. 因为不论你是Young 还是 old，父母都是最亲的人，不然道理上不通！5。But even though---改为as (随着)；原句中的but even though 这个连词完全说不通。6。families may become more close----more closer；这个是比较级，表示比以前更亲近；7。deep ---deeply ;这里需要副词8。find a chance and to do ---find a chance and do; and 表示并列，结构应该相同，find是原型，do也需要用原型；9。have talk with them---have a talk weth them; have a talk 是固定短语10。happily---happy ；这里需要形容词修饰，happily是副词。Glad to help you!O(∩_∩)O~
many改成much,you改成your，dearer改成dearest,deep改成deeply,for families get toghter改成for families to get toghter,thought of 去掉of, and to do something去掉to,have talk 中间加a,your parents will be very happily，happily改成happy
