Climbing is my favourite sport.I am very fond it, especiallyin later autume. One day, early in the morning, my friends and I put on our shoes and start off. After climbing for half an hour, they got the top of the mountain. There we had a good view for mile.
To the north, a big river crossed the city. There was many ships sailing busy. A lot of beautiful trees were there, too. The sun started to go down, but it was time for us to go back. On way back, we were laughing and talking all the time. We had had a good time that day.
到底有几处错误我也不清楚，大约10处左右吧。哪位高手知道啊？
改得多的，对得多的我给分的会多的。
时间截止至22号晚8点，因为23好号就要去上学了。
非常感谢！！！
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