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No pain No gain
I encountered a terrible thing when I was 10 years and I never forgot it, because at that moment I was between life and death.
I was born in a coastal city, the peoples of this city very fond of swimming in the sea and I always go to the beach after dinner, this had become my habit. That day of my story was a bad weather day and sea wind was so heavy, I was very overconfidence of my swimming technique, so still had went to the beach and swum in the sea alone, I was very excited so farther and farther away from the shore, maybe that is not very far for adult, but I dare say the water deeper than my height, the weather is getting worse, I realized the danger so decided to return to shore, but it's too late, a big wave came towards me suddenly then I choked a water and be swallowed by water, I tried to stay awake and exhausted all efforts to self help, but a big wave follow came again, then
I was completely submerged into the water, I feel my consciousness gradually blurred even can't feel the pain, but a big hand caught me and pulled me to move, I do not know anything but I realized that I returned to the beach later, my father saved me and I cried the moment,I don't know why I was crying in that time, maybe because fear or felt happy, maybe I was moved.
Later I knew that my father always came to the beach with me, but never made me aware that him. My father gave me my life and my father saved me in the face of death, I do not want to thank my father here because in front of parents everyday is Thanksgiving.
There is a saying in China, just "the one who drowns is the one who is good at swimming", so after that incident, I always very careful when I was swimming, may be this is by falling we learn to go safely.

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千问 | 2011-3-31 10:37:29 | 显示全部楼层
不劳无获(这篇文章,可能要换种译法,未尝苦果,则无收获)我10岁时,遇到了一件可怕的事情,因为那一刻我就在生死之间。我出生在沿海城市,这个城市的人们非常喜欢在海里游泳,而我通常晚饭后就到海滩上去,这已经成了我的习惯。事情当天,天气恶劣,海上刮着大风。而我对自己的游泳技术过于自信,当时我太兴奋了,走得离海岸越来越远。也许那段距离对于大人不算什么,但是对于我而言,我敢说,水可以没过我整个人,天气更糟了,这时我才意识到危险,但是太迟了,一个大浪突然向我袭来,我呛了一口水,海水把我吞噬了,我尽力想保持清醒,竭尽全力自救,但又有一个个大浪打来,然后我完全沉入了水中。我觉得自己的意识越来越模糊,甚至对疼痛都失去了感觉,我什么也不知道了,除了意识
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千问 | 2011-3-31 10:37:29 | 显示全部楼层
No pain No gainI encountered a terrible thing when I was 10 years and I never forgot it, because at that moment I was between life and death.I was born in a coastal city, t
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千问 | 2011-3-31 10:37:29 | 显示全部楼层
后面太乱了,就直接改了。你对照一下原文就知道了。Glance at the graph provided (which) (原句里有glance,show两个动词,语法上错误,加上which,把它变成了从句)shows(主语graph是单数) the demand for electricity in England during typical d
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千问 | 2011-3-31 10:37:29 | 显示全部楼层
I encountered a terrible thing when I was 10 years (old). (And) I (can) never (forget)表达永远不能忘记 it because at that moment I was between life and death.I was born in a coastal city
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千问 | 2011-3-31 10:37:29 | 显示全部楼层
一分耕耘一分收获 我遇到了一个可怕的事情时,我10岁,我永远不会忘记,因为在那一刻,我生命与死亡之间它。 我是出生在沿海城市,这个城市非常喜欢在海里游泳,我总是在晚饭后到海滩上的人民,这已经成了我的习惯。那一天我的故事是一个恶劣的天气一天,海风是如此沉重,我很为我的游泳技术过于自信,所以还是不得不去海滩,独自在海中游泳,我感到非常兴奋,所以距
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