帮我检查一下这封信有没有错误 ,是给日本的教授写的,不妥当的地方,请指出来,谢谢

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I am a student from China and sorry to bother you at this time.
My name is Tou bunhaku,and now I am studying Japanese in human-academy
Japanese language school Tokyo Campus.
In July,2008,I graudated from XXXX majoring in Computer Application
Technology with mainly study of basic knowledge ofcomputer,network,and
software.
I worked in a coalmine in my hometown after graduation at Network Security
and Control for a year.I am surprised by Japanese technique and “made in
Japan”.So I think studying in Japan would improve my ability,in order that
I came to Japan.
From the college,I have been very interested in Internet,I think Internet
brings us disclosure of personal information,not only convenience.So when I
know content of your research,I do hope to be your research student,and
study in the area of personal information protection under the guidance of
you .
Thanks for your time,looking forward to your reply.
Sincerely yours

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千问 | 2010-11-1 23:51:21 | 显示全部楼层
当然有了。你BOTHER 那个教授,你怎么知道他是什么时候收到,我觉得去掉AT THIS TIME.不过这估计也算不上是BOTHER,如果他看了这个词可能下面的都不看了。还有,你真的要寄给教授,怎么感觉内容好浅显。
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千问 | 2010-11-1 23:51:21 | 显示全部楼层
you'd better write in Japanese
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千问 | 2010-11-1 23:51:21 | 显示全部楼层
最好能好好研究一下那个教授的研究内容,然后报一下自己做过的研究。要说明你有非常感兴趣和强烈的学习欲望。要让教授觉得你来了可以帮助他的研究。另外自我介绍的名字,既然是英文的就不要写日文读法了(英文加汉字比较好)。
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