帮我批改一下英语作文吧，谢谢

显示全部楼层 · 2010-11-3 00:04:45

May,20th,Saturday
Yesterday,I with my classmate planed to climbing worth mountain and had a picnic.In the morning,we called togather at 7 o'clock in school gate.Soon,it was raining,but we took bicycle continue,and we arrivedthe foot of the mountain for an hour later.For a moment,the rain was stoped,so we climbed the mountain and appreciate great sign.Then,we took photographes,sang,leaped,made games,cheesed,and felt so happy.At last,after lunch,we went down the mountain and all people felt too tired.

千问 · 2010-11-3 00:04:45

首先日记格式不对，请参照如下标准。英文日记通常由书端和正文两个部分组成。日记常以第一人称记下当天生活中的所见、所闻、所做或所想的事情。中、英文的日记三格式大致一样。英语日记的书端是专门写日记的日期、星期和天气的。左上角是日期(年、月、日)、星期。右上角写上当天的天气情况，如：Sunny, Fine, Rainy, Windy, Snowy, Cloudy等。1.日期表达有多种形式。年、月、日都写时，通常以月、日、年为顺序，月份可以缩写，日和年用逗号隔开。例如： December 18, 2003 或者 Dec. 18, 2003A) September 1, 2004或September 1st, 2004也可省略写成Sept. 1

千问 · 2010-11-3 00:04:45

Yesterday,I with my classmate planed to climbing worth mountain and had a picnic.改为Yesterday,I planed to climb worth mountain and had a picnic with my classmates.In the morni

千问 · 2010-11-3 00:04:45

把第一句中的 with my classmate 放到句子的末尾。第二句把called togather改成 get together.把 in the school gate 改成 at the school gate.第三句把 we took bycycle continue 改成 we continue by bicycle.把 arr

千问 · 2010-11-3 00:04:45

意思不明确，有语法错误