帮忙修改一下英语自我简介，主要是语法错误，小升初用的

显示全部楼层 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

Hello. I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name isXXX. Presently attending XXX.i’m XX years old.
I am very fond of history. I have broad interests to fill my spare time like many other youngers. I love reading books, especially those about history of China. I like history best in all of my hobbys.In addition, I enjoy study science and go swimming which enrich my mind and strengthen my body.
I always believe that " Do what you can with what you have ,where you are." One will easily lag behind unless he keeps on striving, that is what strongly supports me through those troubles that nearly drag me down.
With all my enthusiasm, passion, energy and aspiration, I’m dream to be a historian that know all about history and help people to discover the unsolved riddle in the historical.
Thank you for your attention.

千问 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

第二段“abroad”改为“wild”，“youngers”改为“youngs”
“about history of china”history前面加“the”
hobby复数y变ie加s
enjoy doing sth.最后一段 I am dream后面应为of doing sth.
help sb, do sth.就这么多吧~~~~O(∩_∩)O~

千问 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

1.第二段“abroad”改为“wild”，“youngers”改为“youngs”
“about history of china”history前面加“the”
hobby复数y变ie加s
enjoy doing sth.最后一段 I am dream后面应为of doing st

千问 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

第二句应该改为：I have many hobbies,one of which is playing badminton. My dream is to be a psychologist.翻译：Itook up the badminton at the age of 7. 本想和你解释为什么这样改可字数有限。

千问 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

Hello. I am glad to be here for this interview. First[，] let me introduce myself. My name isXXX. Presently attending XXX.i’m XX years old.I am very [frond] of history. I have b

千问 · 2011-4-21 22:11:08

去掉introduce myself自然一些During my spare time, like many youngs, I have lots of interets to fullfill my time.history of china改成chinese history. like history best in all of my ho