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1,电子词典的优点
2,电子词典的缺点
3,我的看法。


advantages and disadvantage of electrionic dictionary
Nowadays, there have an increasing number of electrionic dictionarys apprent in china .More and more people like to use these to findingwords in daily life.Electrionic dictionarys really have their advantages, the obvirous one is debutlessly its speed which save people a lot of time.With electrionic dirctionary the word be find repidly and easely.On the contrary ,without electrionic dictionarys ,perhaps people has to reconsider how to findind words in the dictionary.Besides ,they are very small,so it is convenicence for people to carrying it.

However , electrionic dictionarys also have disadvantage .For one something,people especially students have become too indispensableto remember words mean..For another many peoples are addicted to playing gamein the electrionic dictionary,it is bed for people studyor work.

concerning with the speed and convenience ,They will be ,I think. become more in the future because in a competing saciety how to save time is a aim that people court to.

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千问 | 2011-4-11 22:36:36 | 显示全部楼层
除了语法,我还想说点哈,仅个人观点;你的这个文章内容有点空洞,最重要的是没有分清层次结构,虽然有一个besides,,但是但是优点说的那段论点论据都太不充足了。从文章看,你是倾向优点,我认为开头就应该亮明观点,这样阅卷老师的时候才会觉得你逻辑是清晰的。。。语法我就不说了哈,楼上都说的挺细致的
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千问 | 2011-4-11 22:36:36 | 显示全部楼层
apprent是什么?你想说的是什么。finding 前面是to 后面应该是find。dictionarys 应该是ies。obvirous应该是obvious。debutlessly应该是undoubtedlywhich save应该是savesthe word be find repidly and easely 应该是is fo
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千问 | 2011-4-11 22:36:36 | 显示全部楼层
补充楼上:1.第一句there和 have还能一起用?there be句型啊!怎么还能用have?2.apprent ?你想说的是出现这个单词吧!查查英语字典;3.Electrionic dictionarys really have 用have?个人认为dictionaries该是集体名词,应该用单数has;4.have their advantages中
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千问 | 2011-4-11 22:36:36 | 显示全部楼层
apprent改成apparently,finding改成find,obvirous改成obvious,easely改成easily,The words can be found rapidly and easily by electronic dictionary.They are very small,so its convenient to c
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