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谢谢了!!今晚就要,看看有没有用词不当和拼写错误的!
My family
Hello!Everyone.I’m Lin bingjie.Please call me Beenle.I have a family.There are four people in my famliy,my parents,my borther and I.My famliy is pretty good!I’m really happy!
My father si a teacher.He works in university of BNU.He doesn’t like watching TV,but He likes reading newspapers and books.He is good at computers,and likes play sports very much!He said:“Sports si good at my health!.”
My mother si a manager.She is a good manager of office and a good mother in home.I think she is pretty,because she is kind-hearted.
My bother si cute and funniest in my family.He is one years old.He just can call “mother”,“father”and “sister”.I think he is smart,because he can often have some surprise for me!
My families are always doing what is best for me.They are always on my side.
I love each person in my family.I love my sweet warm home!

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千问 | 2008-11-2 20:38:47 | 显示全部楼层
My famliy is pretty good 改为My famliy is very good likes play sports very much改为likes playing sports very much Sports si good at my health改为Sports is good to my health She is a good manager of office and a good mother in home改为 She is a good manager in office and a good mother at home My bother si cute and funniest in my ...
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My family Hello!Everyone.I’m Lin bingjie.Please call me Beenle.I have a family.There are four people in my famliy,my parents,my borther and I.My famliy is pretty good!I’m really ...
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千问 | 2008-11-2 20:38:47 | 显示全部楼层
I’m really happy! 删掉这句
si 都打错了 是is
He works in university of BNU 把后面的of BNU删掉,in university后面不能加定语
He doesn’t like watching TV,but He likes reading newspapers and bo...
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