yesterday
Yesterday,I had a big surprise. there is a big park in Renmin Road,and we went there yesterday.There were lots and lots of people there. There were many beautiful flowers and trees there. The people was sang,danced and played chess there. We had a picnic in the park,the food was Chinese food,they were very delicious. Then we saw Chinese dancing in there. I really liked it. I want learn this dancing.
It's a very prefect day!
第一句话有些问题，用surprise有些不妥，和后文没有什么关系。你可以写成“I was very happy yesterday”或者“yesterday was a fine day”.“There were lots and lots of people there”这句话有问题应改为There were lots of people there. "The people was sang,danced and played chess there."People前不加"the" 而且这句话语法有问题，应该改为People sang danced and played chess.“be+doing”是现在进行时不适合用在这里，因为整篇文...
Yesterday, I had a big surprise.There is a big park on Renmin Road, we went there yesterday.There were lots and lots of people there. There were many beautiful flowers and tree...
