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查看11 | 回复3 | 2009-6-18 16:38:30 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
要求:假如你是明明,您父亲长期在外工作,父亲节快到了,你很想念父亲,很感谢父亲给了你一个温暖的家,让你过着幸福的生活。请根据提示内容,给父亲写一封电子邮件。
注意:1.短文必须包括所有要点2.可适当发挥3.60-80字
Dear father,
How are you?Father's Day is coming soon.Are U okay this days?I miss you very much at this time of the year. I know ,because of your work and for me a better life,you have to be away from our family.But it seems that you always beside in my heart.Thank you for giving me so prefect life.I am very happy with u .You show me what is deep as sea.I will work hard to make you feel warm.
Please take good of yourself.I will always love u.

love,

Mingming

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千问 | 2009-6-18 16:38:30 | 显示全部楼层
Dear Dad(更为亲切),How are you these days?Father's Day is coming.(不需加soon. are u okey的确是语意有重复)l miss you very much at this special time of the year.(点明特殊时间更好)l know that you have to be away from our family because of your job.l also realize that you want to offer me a better life.(原句不是很通顺这样改我认为比较清晰~)And it seems that you are alway...
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千问 | 2009-6-18 16:38:30 | 显示全部楼层
Dear father,
How are you these days?Father's Day is coming soon.I miss you very much espically(特别地,这个单词可以更强烈的表达思念) the time of the festival like this.Beause you wanna offer m...
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千问 | 2009-6-18 16:38:30 | 显示全部楼层
Dear fatherHow are you?Father's Day is coming soon. Are you ok these days?I miss you so much at this time of the year.I know it's because of your work that make us apart from e...
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