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I am opposed to the view that switch off all the cyber cafes. Many parents and teachers insisted that the Internet will be bad affected to students’ learning, I think that is a wrong concept. Although there are many games in Internet cafes, but the adequate entertainment can relieve study pressure. What’s more? The Internet doesn’t only have the bad side. In the Internet, we can search for information to enrich our knowledge, can also read the novel to cultivate our taste. All in all, the Internet is a double-edged sword, If we use it in the right way, it can promote our learning and improve our lives.
日记1
Today was a tired but happy day. I went shopping with my mother. In fact, I enjoyed shopping very much. We went to the GanJiakou building. You can’t imagine how cheap the clothes were. I like a T-shirt very much that has different patterns on both sides. One side is a beautiful little princess with a crown, and the other side is a handsome compact holding crutches President. What lovely it is! So I brought it without hesitation. In short, this day I was very happy, and there are many harvests that my wardrobe was full of a wide range of clothes.
日记2
I was too boring to I can’t stay at home. So I listened to my mother and decided to go downstairs to see the Office of fitness. I have been studied hip-hop long ago, and I had not dance a long time. Today just catch up the hip-hop class, so I decided with no hesitate. The coach is a boy who graduated from Department. He is high but not burly, it gives me a very warm feeling. One-hour lesson not only made me found the feeling of the previous dance, but also reminded people who have been together before. Suddenly I missed the past students and the time we laughed together.

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千问 | 2009-7-31 20:41:16 | 显示全部楼层
我反对这样的观点,即关掉所有网吧。许多家长和教师坚持认为,互联网将是不好的影响学生的学习,我认为这是一个错误的概念。虽然有许多场比赛中的网吧,但适当的娱乐能减轻学习压力。更重要的是?互联网并不只有坏的方面。在互联网上,我们可以搜索信息,以丰富我们的知识,还可以看小说,培养我们的口味。总之,互联网是一把双刃剑,如果我们使用它以正确的方式,它可以促进我们的学习和改善我们的生活。 今天是疲惫,但快乐的日子。我去购物与我的母亲。事实上,我非常喜欢购物。我们到甘家口店(这个店是什么)建设。你无法想象有多么廉价的衣服。我喜欢的T恤非常有不同的方式对双方。一件是一个美丽的小公主的王冠,和另一件是一个英俊的紧凑总统举行拐杖。多么可爱啊!所以,我毫不犹豫地把它。...
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千问 | 2009-7-31 20:41:16 | 显示全部楼层
错误很多。最明显的although 不能和 but 连用。还有拼错的。...
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千问 | 2009-7-31 20:41:16 | 显示全部楼层
日记二最后一句 写错了吧...
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