请帮我看看这段英语是否有语法错误。

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hi,Roger,It was my first message to you.

这是我第一次给你的留言。
My English is not so good that the message will be short and maybe there will be a lot of grammatical errors.
我的英语并不是很好所以这封信将会很短，或许还会有很多语法错误~
on the Australian Open,the weather is so hot.How did you adapt to it and faced with different opponents, how you feel？
在澳网上，天气非常热，请问你是怎么适应的，还有面对不同的对手，你的感觉如何？
Last,I hope you will have access to a growing number of honorary.and as a Chinese,welcome you once again came to my motherland.
最后，我希望你会迎得更多的荣誉，还有作为一个中国人，欢迎你再一次来到我的祖国。
Thank you for your time.
感谢你抽时间看完这封留言。
请帮我看看是否有语法错误，还有什么地方可以改改，可以追加分的
感谢

千问 · 2009-1-30 13:29:20

hi,Roger,It was（is，现在时） my first message to（for，表对象） you. My English is not so（改成that，更地道，that有很，非常的意思） good that（改成so，表原因） the message will be（现在发生的事情，就用is） short and maybe there will be（同理改成are） a lot of grammatical errors.（一般的错误就用mistakes ） on the Australian Open,the weather is so hot.（语序要调整，才更地道，把on the AO调到后面那句话后面去）...

千问 · 2009-1-30 13:29:20

It was my first message to you. 我给你改的是This is my first message to you.My English is not so good that the message will be short and maybe there will be a lot of grammatical er...

千问 · 2009-1-30 13:29:20

1.It was my first message to you换成it was the first time that I left message to you好点， 2.errors换成mistakes好点， 3.How did you adapt to it and faced with different opponents, how yo...

千问 · 2009-1-30 13:29:20

on the Australian Open,the weather is so hot.How did you adapt to it and faced with different opponents, how you feel？最后的那个应该是How did you feelLast,I hope you will have access t...