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看看有没有用语不当或语法错误我是初二的,所以不要改得太难哟!!
Today, I tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped me and asked me for money. The beggars are two old women with dirty hair, which smelled sourness and I must hold my my nose. They said with a poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread.
I thought it maybe true, so I gave them two yuan.
But two weeks late, I walked on the same raod and stopped by the beggars again. They said in same poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread. I surprised and said : Oh , you asked money again from me
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sourness改为sourmust hold my nose改为had to hold my breathgave改为give,不可用a fewcame from Sichuan 改为come from Sichuan have not ate anything改为have not had anything to eatjust only two yuan for two pieces of bread前边加we needmaybe改为may belate改为laterThey said in same poor voice中的same前加theCould you gave 改为Could you give其他...
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千问 | 2009-2-19 18:41:17 | 显示全部楼层
Today, I[will]tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped {me} and asked me for[some] money. The beggars are(were) two old women with dirty hair, w...
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Today, I want to tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped me and asked me for money. The beggars were two old women with dirty hair, which smell...
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重新帮你翻了一遍 有些语法错误Today, I tell you a true story about two beggars and I. One day, a beggar stopped me, asking me for money. A beggar is two old woman with a dirty hair, smell, I mu...
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千问 | 2009-2-19 18:41:17 | 显示全部楼层
I will tell you....或者I'd like to tell youCould you give us..... not gave we have not eatnot atetwo weeks laternot lateI was surprised You asked money from me again ...
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