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显示全部楼层 · 2006-4-8 20:46:30

Zhang San has 时态好像不对 If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor. comes, takes come改成comes take改成takes，三单

千问 · 2006-4-8 20:46:30

这是修改后的,请赐教! There is no money in this place(题目)Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San.One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money, I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon, he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden. He went to the garden and put the money in the ground. After a minute, he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor. I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall.Zhang San had a neighbour called Wang Er. He saw Zhang San hide his money and took the money away. But he was worried about Zhang San knows who took away the money. So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’ on the wall.How silly the two men were!

千问 · 2006-4-8 20:46:30

Long,long ago , there wasa rich man in a town called Zhang San . 中的 called 不合适。

千问 · 2006-4-8 20:46:30

Long, long ago, there was a rich man in a town called Zhang San. One day, he was stay in his house and looked at his money. He though,’ My house is not big enough to put my money, I must look for a place to put it.’ Soon, he saw the garden and decided to put his money in the garden. He went to the garden and put the money in the ground. After a minute, he though,’ If a thief come to my house and take my money away, I will become poor. I must tell the thief not to take my money away.’ So he wrote ‘There is no money in this place’ on the wall. Zhang San had a neighbour called Wang Er. He saw Zhang San hide his money and took the money away. But he was worried about Zhang San knows who took away the money. So he wrote ‘Your neighbour has never taken your money.’ on the wall. How silly the two men were!

千问 · 2006-4-8 20:46:30

此为我根据你的意思所做的更改:There is no money in this place Long, long ago, there was a rich man called Zhang San in a town. One day, he staid home and looked at his money. He thought to himself,”my house is not big enough to put my money in. I will have to find a bigger place to hide it in.’ Later, he saw his garden and made his mind to put his money in the garden. He went to the garden and concealed the money under the ground. Suddenly, an idea came to his head,’ if a thief ever comes to my house and takes my money away, I will become poor. I have to inform the thief not to take my money.’ So he wrote on the wall saying ‘There is no money in this place’. Zhang San had a neighbor called Wang er. Wang er saw the words on the wall and stole all the money. But he was afraid that Zhang San would be suspicious of him, so he wrote instead ‘Your neighbor has never taken your money.’ How silly were the two men!