大家来评评我这篇英语日记！O(∩_∩)O谢谢

显示全部楼层 · 2009-7-9 15:49:34

interest的意思是兴趣，有意思，不能表示高兴，兴奋，快乐。给你改下吧:What a happy day today.I ate a delicious breakfast in the morning and finished my homework in the afternoon.After finishing my homework,I played ping-pong with my friend(和一个人打就用单数).Then I went to shopping with my mother and father.In the evening.I played games with my favorite fr...

千问 · 2009-7-9 15:49:34

went shopping就可以不用再加to而且interesting不可以指人哦。最后一段确实有些不好。你可以写成I think today was very interesting but alittle busy。总体说还可以啦。。如果能将一些事情再扩大些就会更好！...

千问 · 2009-7-9 15:49:34

I am interesting.换成today is an interesting day.比较好。in morning,in afternoon,in evening 换成in the morning,in the afternoon, in the evening比较好...

千问 · 2009-7-9 15:49:34

额,请问你几年级??我认为不应该用interesting这个词,感觉像是说"我今天非常有趣",读上去很奇怪~~favourite拼错~~最后一句好像读不通~~我认为不要用of,直接"i think my..."文笔普通,但最后一句我认为不错~~还有:不需要分这么多段~~希望你的作文能写得越来越好~~~...

千问 · 2009-7-9 15:49:34

句式有点单调，没关系慢慢来。不过有一点，went后面不加to.
因为是过去思考所以用think 的过去式。总体还不错。思路清晰。
加油！好好努力吧！...