I know you love me, A long time ago knew. 这句话最后面的knew是多余的。把knew去掉这句话很有意境！Do you think I cruel. 这句话I am cruel里面的am最好不要省略。如果要句式一致的话可以用You think I am cruel? 这样就有点rap的风格纹身的话我推荐把所有的will都变成'll的形式。这首小诗的意境不错，有点非主流，带有宗教气息。我觉得这样已经很好了~...
14 years old. Mourn for.17 years old, how good age.How can you have the heart to.Are you afraid of? I see that your eyes have fear.You are too selfish,You escape all you don'...
