第一行：第二句改为"I am so happy to be able to stand here ." ；第三句：最好改为"For I am going to tell you about my dream."；第二行："star"让人一开始摸不到头脑，建议改为"famous singer"；还有这么短的演讲，不要用"firstly,secondly..."；最后一句话时态不对，还有立意的出发点有点问题。。。 帮你重写一份吧，如下：Hello, my dear teachers. Today, I am so happy to be able to stand here to talk about one of my dream...
teachers-- teacherI am very happy to able to be able to stand here today--
I am very happy to be able to stand here todayBcause firstly--Because firs...
