请各位帮忙修改高一英语短文，有什么语法错误什么的，也可以帮忙润色一下，或者换一些高级句型

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Good afternoon, everyone.Today, I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is Li Hua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior 1 student in Zhongshan No.1 Middle School.Li Hua is incredibly hard-working, so he does well in computer, Chinese, math, English and PE.He loves sports,he can swim very well and he ...

千问 · 2012-9-22 15:32:39

在introduce后加个you 第三行did改为does 在won前加has...

千问 · 2012-9-22 15:32:39

呃语法错误好多啊for example（举个例子）只是范文改大写的我就不大写了没时间仅供参考Hello，everyone . goodafteron. Today, I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua。His birthday i...