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“First swimming in the seasideSummer holidays has been arriving at , I have been expecting that day to swim for to study of the seaside.This has arrived at one day , my state of mind has been very strained, think that ocean is with waters raging be still calm , still piling up one tier small wave after another. Arrive in that time! It truns out that ocean is boundless. But I what to be able to afford no consideration to , running away toward ocean, have not run having been drowned to the billows water that I am moved towards in part by the surge, I not having been daunted by ocean , still running away toward ocean, I prepare to jump the sea moment, thinks of: "Can I drop into ocean going to "? Really I away go in. Because of I am incapable swim for. Mother has seen me , has adopted a baby up me immediately. And ask me: "Can you swim for "? I said "I can not swim for ". Mother says: Come to teach you "me! Mother has unfolded a technology first performing a dolphin being like traveling law , mother has made dolphin's posture first , has jumped into sea mile once going in , has come out all of a sudden. Let me hold a person in high esteem , think that I am right away very amazing if I learn the mother technology. I say in a hurry: "Mother , mother, teach me quickly! Mother says: "Easy to teach you coming me". Mother holds on to my body first , two hand rolls about forward by me , the foot is also the same.I am big with pride after a while, doctrine: "Mother has let me go quickly , I already may swim for, mother is forced to let me go no way out. But I still can not swim for , mother says: "In the world every matter simplicity in not imagining to you, I have listened to very ashamed, I have stood up continuing white silk , failure, but I disappointed , still continued practising.Finally guided by mother, I have learned have a swim , I have also understood a principle at the same time: In the world each a matter simplicity in not imagining to you.”这是文章吗?
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千问 | 2009-8-30 14:04:12 | 显示全部楼层
题目不对,seaside是海边海滨,是土~~要么直接用sea 或者用shallow sea也行错误是有点多 太长了
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千问 | 2009-8-30 14:04:12 | 显示全部楼层
............好长。
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