请大家帮我改一下考研练习的英语作文

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查看11 | 回复2 | 2009-12-1 16:41:23 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
主旨是对的,句子写的也挺通顺的,没什么大的问题,只是你前面的描述太多了,自己最后一段表述观点的内容就很少了,应该更详细的表述应该怎么看待这个现象。ps本人09年考研过来了。。。
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千问 | 2009-12-1 16:41:23 | 显示全部楼层
Fro m the picture we can see a spider web that there’s a man with a computer in each small space.Apparently, it is indicating the influence on by internet.No matter how far we are away from each other, we could contact through it just like face-to-face. Otherwise, along with the excessively frequent use of computer, the negative effect has been on the way. More and more people are accustomed to chat with friends on the internet, instead of going out together, so that the relationship between us has been weaken increasingly.How long have been the last time you get together? Imagine that you come across an old friend in the street in one day. Besides gladness, there are some strange feelings one the mind that you cannot talk freely as you do on the internet. At such moment, you nreal a long time, indeed.So, what are you going to do next? To call your friends out or to continue to surf the internet?
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千问 | 2009-12-1 16:41:23 | 显示全部楼层
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