第二段第二行改为read books and hand their homework.第二段第三行will后不能加rang,will应加动词原形,如你要表现一个过去的时态,应改为would ring,前面的will也要改为would;同一行里listening改为listen;第三段改为in the morning;will可删去,这里并不用表示将来时态,只是一般的叙述,第四段也是这样;Such as Chinese, Math, Englishand so on这句话应该这样加一个and;After lunch, they have some time to have a rest. This is a day about Chinese students.student后必须加s还有三四两段有些重复我只改出这么多啦...水平有限....多指教!