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1:中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势
2:导致这种现象的原因
3:怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距

Bridging the Gap between the Urban and Rural Areas
With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased.The urban areas developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.
I think there are two reasons lead to this gap.For one thing,the cultural and educational work is not develop well,so many rural people have not a good educational level to help their hometown to develop.For another thing,many rural younger goes to the urban areas are develop well and there are not many talented staying in rural areas.
We should take some mesures to bridge the gap between the urban and rural areas.Firstly,the rural governments should devote major efforts to educational work.Secondly,the country governments should offer a large number of money to help those rural areas to develop.Lastly,the rural people should stay in their hometown to help their hometown to develop.

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千问 | 2010-11-23 22:21:43 | 显示全部楼层
值得肯定的是,没有错误的单词,但是病句很多,即句子结构错误严重.1.With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased(前面那个动名词根本就缺少句子成分)2.The urban areas [are] developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.the rural areas are geting worse and worse.3. is not developing very well4.so
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千问 | 2010-11-23 22:21:43 | 显示全部楼层
1 The urban areas developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.改为While the urban areas develop better and better,the rural areas get worse and wor
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千问 | 2010-11-23 22:21:43 | 显示全部楼层
第一段中,seems后应该接to be increasing比较好,seem to do sth。第二句话中没有动词,是错误的。第二段第一句话有两个动词,不对,lead应改为leading;第二句话is not developing well,be动词后应接ing形式。many rural younger,既然many了,就应用复数,而且动词也应相应变化
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千问 | 2010-11-23 22:21:43 | 显示全部楼层
第一段和第二段的第一句怪怪的
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