茕碣敬请高人帮忙修改英文诗

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The moon shines a beautiful shadows.
The flowers gave off a fragrant scent.
I visit to Rabbit in deep cloud.
The wind was clean up on high mountain.
Hold the wine to ask crescent moon.
Listened to an engrossing sound as from sky.
Nymph is dancing with immortals music.
The cherry bay sent up new shoots in the palace.
Palace of moon is far on the space.
There are burning passion for the loved in world.
The depth of the universe is immeasurable.
I want to roam in outer space by wind.
谢谢非若鸣的修改。但我觉还不满意。可否重改三,四句:
I visit to Rabbit in deep cloud.
云深访玉兔
The wind was clean up on high mountain.
山高风自清

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千问 | 2011-1-9 11:37:18 | 显示全部楼层
帮你改良过的:The moon reflects a beautiful shadows. The flowers gave off a fragrant scent. I look at the clouds high in the sky(这句话全改了, 因为原来的完全没有意思)The wind is blowing in high mountain. I ask crescent moon with wine in my hand.Listened to an engrossing sound from the sky. Nymph is dancing with immortals' music. New sho
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千问 | 2011-1-9 11:37:18 | 显示全部楼层
The moon reflects beautiful shadows.
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