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My name is ***.I graduated from ****school in ** Province.I am approachable and have affinity .As a girl, I am attentive and always pay attentions to detail.But my brain is often filled with all kinds of new ideas. While I am happy to accept the challenge to take on frustration and stress,I often experience life's ups and downs and learn to get along with myself throughgoing long-distance running alone.Learning music as a regular after-school hobby has enriched my artistic accomplishment.
Paying attention to current events, some things without justice,equality and peace are touch my heart.For example the gap between developing and developed countries is becoming much wider.and China's social security system is not perfect.As more and more people devoting themselves to public service career,in general, the development of public welfare
Is the trend of world development.however,China's related organizations are short of resources,experience ,expertise ,rules and regulations .I will expand my international horizon, , learn about international trends, cultivate critical awareness and accept Advanced values.Such as
the concept of Concerned about environmental protection, development of low-carbon economy and the participation in poverty alleviation.I would also like to
Learning management knowledge and experience, especially mature management experience.
I will continue to improve the artistic quality simultaneously in 某某校.I will start to learn art because I think it can improve my ability in design.In addition,make full use of the platform forthis international metropolis to take part in some social welfare activities will deepen the understanding of my moral and make some like-minded friends.Doing appropriate amount of part-time job not only make me Integrate into society,but also develop my own financial ability.I'm sure that the education system and resouce are keys to my goal, and I will never regret to choose X X shool with both of them advanced and perfect.
一楼为中文一稿 ,希望可以修改的流畅连贯,符合外国人的阅读习惯。谢谢诶!!!!!!!可应质量追加悬赏!!!!!!

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千问 | 2010-7-10 18:06:21 | 显示全部楼层
I am approachable and have affinity .I am approachable and having affinity.如果后面用have,就得在and have间加上I,为什么我也不知道。As a girl, I am attentive and always pay attentions to detail.attentive 貌似改为careful比较好。attentions 去掉s。 pay attention to 是固定搭配.detail 用复数details 。But my brain is often filled with all kinds of new ideas.
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千问 | 2010-7-10 18:06:21 | 显示全部楼层
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千问 | 2010-7-10 18:06:21 | 显示全部楼层
我的名字叫***,毕业于**中学。我的个性平易近人,具有亲和力。作为一个女生,我心思细腻且重视细节,却又敢为他人先,大脑常常被各种新奇的想法所充斥。我乐于接受挑战的同时敢于接受挫折和压力,常在长跑的过程中体验起伏的人生和学习自处。学习音乐作为课余一项固定爱好丰富了我的艺术素养。在关注时事的过程中,我常常被一些现今世界中所存在的不平衡的现象所触动。比如
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