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May 24 Tuesday Rainy
Today,the weather is very cold while the temperature rised to 30 C.I think it is very strange and the temperature has been always strange since a few years ago.What is the reason that it happen?What will happen in one year、ten years or twenty years.I think our enviorment got bad litter by litter.The problem of these years temperature got strange is worth of we pay attention to it.We should react against the Let's goes into action.
May 25 wednesday Sunny
Today,someone who joined literature society came our classroom to promote a magazine that is published by literature society.To be honesty,the magazine is very good.I would buy one but the man who came to our classroom is charge five yuan and I only have four yuan.So I can't get a magazine.I borrowed the magazine from my classmate,who buy the magazine.When I finished reading the magazine,the monitor of literature came our classroom and promote the magazine aging.I'm very gloomy,because borrowed the magazine cost all my might,if I know this I wouldn't borrow the magazine.
May 27 Friday Cloudy
Today I get a quota of people that poor financial difficulties allowance.I'm very sad because I think this mind of behaviour is wrong and the financial difficulities allowance should give some student whose family is really difficulites and need to help and my family isn't rich but also isn't so poor that need to help.But this behavour isn't of my own accord and I won't get the money of the financial difficulties because my class will get the money to give my classmate and I on avarage and the behaviour that I try to get the quota of people which the poor student financial difficulties.I have to do something I don't want to do.
May 30 Monday Rainy
Today,I'm very sadly.I got a bad grade in English examination.Of course,my grade isn't very bad for a common student.But I want to go to a good colloge so I have to study very hard and I must keep my grade is very good.But why is the reality far away from my dream?I think for surely I study as hard as posible.Why did I get a so bad grade?It could be said that I didn't work enough hard?I think it't right.I will remmeber a word:Nothing in impossile to a willing mind.
My life is decided to me and isn't decided to God,if God want to hold me back I will kill God。

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千问 | 2011-6-7 11:01:57 | 显示全部楼层
为了他人帮助你修改,我来帮助翻译过来,以下是正文。5月24日星期二今天多雨,天气非常寒冷,气温升高到30区间觉得很奇怪,气温一直以来的ago.What几年一直奇怪的是它发生的原因,什么会发生在一个一年,十年或二十years.I觉得我们的环境得到了这些年来气温litter.The垃圾问题坏了奇怪的是值得我们注意的应该反抗打伤它在让我们去付诸行动。 5月25日星期三今天天气晴朗,谁加入了文学社的人来到我们的课堂,以促进一个由文学society.To是诚实出版杂志,该杂志是非常good.I会买谁的人之一,但来到我们的教室是负责五元,我只有四个yuan.So我不能得到一个magazine.I从我的同学借来的杂志,谁买magazine.When我看完杂志,文...
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千问 | 2011-6-7 11:01:57 | 显示全部楼层
May 24 Tuesday,SunnyToday’s wether is so hot that I can’t stand it.The temperature has been getting hot in these days.I think the reason why is that there is a large number of pe...
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千问 | 2011-6-7 11:01:57 | 显示全部楼层
while 前后时态要相同,而且while表示一种对比,此处最好用and。 What is the reason that it happen.此处很生硬,不地道。why it happened? 说实话,改的地方有点多,就先改到这儿吧。...
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千问 | 2011-6-7 11:01:57 | 显示全部楼层
你初中的?语法错误这么多,建议你好好巩固一下英文基础...
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千问 | 2011-6-7 11:01:57 | 显示全部楼层
while用法错了。前后时态不一致。。。...
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