大家来帮我评评这篇英语日记！O(∩_∩)O谢谢~~~~

显示全部楼层 · 2009-7-10 10:19:07

What a happy day today.
I ate a delicious breakfast in the moring.
and watched TV in afternoon.
After watched TV.I did my homework with favoirite friend.
Then I played baasketball with my friends.
In the evening I take a walk with my father and my mother.

千问 · 2009-7-10 10:19:07

额,还是favourite拼错...我直接帮你改了......what a happy day today(用it is我认为更好）。i ate a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched tv in afternoon.(美英一般在and前面不会分段和加标点，54也可以~~）after watching tv,i did my homework with my favourite friend.then i played basketball with my friends.in the evening i take a walk with my father and mo...

千问 · 2009-7-10 10:19:07

What a happy day （it is)today!I had a delicious breakfast in the morning and watched TV in the afternoon.After watching TV,I did my homework with my favorite friend.Then I pl...

千问 · 2009-7-10 10:19:07

今天很快乐。早晨我吃了一顿很美味的早餐，然后下午看了电视。看完电视后，我和我最好的朋友一起做作业。之后我和我的朋友们一起打篮球。晚上我和爸爸妈妈一起散步。晕死，我还以为是翻译呢？说实话有点像流水账，最好再加一些细节，你每一部分都可以再写的详细些啊，充实一下吧~~~...