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I was very busy that day , I got a lot of things to do , when i got up .,I washed my teeth and had breakfast.there were four lessons in the morning .The first lesson began at 7:50. The last lesson finished at 11: 40.Then we had lunch at school.We only had forty minutes to rest and relax.At 14:00,afternoon classes began.There were four lessons,too.Afterschool.:I had supper with my classmates.I went to bed at about 10:00 at night.
The day i was tired ,,but very interesting.

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千问 | 2011-1-8 13:23:14 | 显示全部楼层
我教你,这样改:That day , I was very busy .I got a lot of things to do ,then i got up .I washed my teeth and had breakfast.Morning l had four lessons .The first lesson began at 7:50. The last lesson finished at 11: 40.Then we had lunch at school.We only had forty minutes to rest and relax.At 14:00,afternoon classes began.Th
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千问 | 2011-1-8 13:23:14 | 显示全部楼层
语句是没什么问题,比较通顺。不过我觉得那个“there be”用得有点不妥当,自己去看看there be句型的用法吧!
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千问 | 2011-1-8 13:23:14 | 显示全部楼层
问题不大水平不高初高中生水平吧
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